What is the message? What do you believe to be the story's purpose? Give details to support your answers,.
Life has sad moments that impact your life, there's no way to change that, but you can at least still help others and yourself to move forward. There's no "happy ending" here, but the author still tries his best to do whatever he can in his community. Who do you think is the intended audience? Give details to support your answer. The intended audience is anyone going through a loss. The story centers around what the author and the people around him have lost due to the tornados, even the losses occurring early in his life; this audience would easily be able to emphasize with his story. Did the author make any purposeful choices in organization, phrasing, tone, or appearance that you found appealing or interesting? The overlay of different reports and radar images at the very start was creative and appealing to me. The entire experience ensures that the user pays attention and stays involved with its navigation system. What emotions did you feel while reading this story? Give specific examples of where and how the text connected with you emotionally? The story provokes sadness, describing the destruction around him seems familiar with my experience in January as a tornado destroyed several buildings a block away from my own home. It still feels weird to pass by where a this buildings once stood and be able to see the riverbank clearly from that angle without obstacles. In comparing this composition to the original "The Storm, In Fragments" by Andrew Grace, how did changes in format impact the rest of the rhetorical situation (message, audience, tone/style, design, context, and occasion)? Like I said before, the interactive format forces readers to stay engaged in the story and thus, remember it better and feel more immersed in it.
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1: To decide my message, I thought about the end result of my story, the results of my grandparents and uncles dumb choices left me confused after I turned to see them standing next to police officers behind me; I felt the only appropriate message was to, "Expect the unexpected". I really didn't plan much for this, mostly because my computer dying set me back a good bit at the start, I put down what details I could remember and added some fill-in details to flesh the story out. The most revisions I faced at the final draft were mostly grammatical errors, I had some phrases that did't quite make sense; I also had a formatting issue with the date and headers I fixed, the other changes were adding more details to the story.
2: Without my classmate pointing out the grammar and format issues I probably would not have noticed them, which was a big help. The "Creating a story for an image" activity was fun and provided some slight stress relief. The information from the student conference gave me a better idea of how to organize and portray my story. 3: The most unproductive habit I had during this was not saving my almost-finished story somewhere else besides my dying computer. If I could give myself from 2 weeks ago advice, I would tell myself to take that computer to someone who could fix it before I lost all my work, and also to get more sleep. 1: What's the best way to implement the 5 senses into my writing?
2: How much of the background detailing should I cut from the first few paragraphs? 3: Would it be better to focus on just one of these "Lessons" at the end or more than one? Well, my life has been relatively boring for the most part. I guess the only thing I could write about would be the experience I had with a tornado. Kind of funny that the story we read deals with the exact same thing.
What is the author's message? What do you believe to be the story's purpose? Give details to support your answers.
Life has troubled times that bring up difficult questions. To note that life is unpredictable and never perfect. His final words about having a sad ending, broken by the hand life's dealt him, make this clear. He's going through a tough time and has no clue what the future holds for him. Who do you think is the intended audience? Give details to support your answer. I think the intended audience is people that has recently dealt with loss. The author starts by stating that recent events have made his memory cloudy and may misguide his own writing, that his life was currently one big jigsaw puzzle that he no idea how to place back together. What do you know about the author from just reading the text? He's lived in Alabama for most of his life, but moved away for a few years and came back at some point. He feels ostracized from his neighbors and strangers he interacts with, despite that, he does his best to help others. Did the author make any purposeful choices in organization, phrasing, tone, or appearance that you found appealing or interesting? He provided a rough summary of a group chat he had right before the tornado struck, I found the talk about salad bowls and tin foil hats interesting because 1: I would not have thought of using a salad bowl. and 2: How did he get tin foil hats on not one, but two cats?! What emotions did you feel while reading this story? Give specific examples of where and how the text connected with you emotionally? I felt a bit sad reading this, I've only dealt with a tornado once, I admit that his experience sounds much worse than mine, but I can relate to the fears he had. My house was mostly unscathed, while his was right in the middle of it. I remember my uncle helping us out while our power and heating was out, and my family gave out free coffee and food for the first responders, so I can relate to the feeling of helping others. Whose ePortfolio are you reviewing? Jailan's / "JD"'s
1. To create my thesis statement, I thought about the message behind the story, I looked at the difference in the authors mindset from the beginning and the end, his change in character showed how he was affected by the events in the story and his message to the audience. In terms of planning and steps, I wrote the paper based on what I knew; then, I reread the story along with my paper and added more details and evidence support my analysis. Most of my revisions in the final draft were for the authors use of Ethos and Pathos to effectively coney his message, I added details regarding the author's use of humorous depictions and the pity he created with his character's family.
2. The comments from my peers were helpful, they pointed out some mistakes such as a blank space in my header and an extra word that was not properly deleted from a previous revision; but, they also pointed out that I had made a claim for my thesis, but did not properly explain it. I believe the part of reviewing others work helped me because their papers were much better than mine and gave me a better idea of what I should be focusing on in my writings. The student conference helped me by emphasizing that I should focus more on the thesis/message and the evidence to back it up. 3. The part of my writing process that was helpful was rereading the text to make sure I fully understood what I was writing about. The part that was not so helpful was probably worrying that the people whose papers I reviewed might judge me harshly for sounding snobbish, I'm anxious like that. If I could go back and give myself advice from 2 weeks ago I would tell myself to do my other work earlier to make more time to improve my paper. 1st Question: What part of writing this does it seem I had the most trouble with?
2nd Question: Which part of writing this was I the best at? 3rd Question: What's the best way to improve at what I had difficulty with? From the video, I can tell that the speaker is a poet/stand-up comedian travelling across the United States, visiting various colleges. He seems to be careful and meticulous about his daily routines, he has a good sense of humor about his crazy life, and he spends his time between working/travelling exploring the world around him. I believe that he's speaking to anyone who's curious about his life, he's never tied down to one place, moving around the country. The overall message is that life is weird, things can change in a short period of time, people could die suddenly, and things don't always go as planned; but despite all of that, things change slowly and get better over time. The purpose of the narrative was to express his thoughts, about what matters, what changes and what doesn't. The funniest part of the video was his discussion about his travel stops and the talk about college degrees. It shows off his sense of humor and some of his thoughts together. The saddest part of the video was his talk about how every town he visits seems the same, old and abandoned, with only several businesses and bars open, empty.
My writing process can be described as being very erratic, I'm extremely forgetful and most times I will probably forget I even have to write something until I see an email or hear about it from someone else. But, on the off chance I do remember having to do the assignment, I typically spend my spare time listening to music and planning out what to write and the flow of the paper. If I was given an assignment I somehow managed to remember in advance, I would first brainstorm, thinking about the topic. I'd say one of the most important things in writing is the focus on the end result: "Do I want to persuade people into believing something with this paper?" or, "Do I want people to be informed or entertained by this?", or maybe a mix in-between those 3 things. But, because I don't the most reliable memory, writing often makes its way into my life in the form of staying up late, becoming sleepy, and having too many writer's cramps to talk about; so I'm hoping to improve upon myself this year, by making my time management and memory better.
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